High school graduates should be required to take off time before entering college. How can this thesis statement be improved?

A. High school graduates should be required to take off time to pursue community service projects before entering college.
B. High school graduates should be required to take off one year to pursue community service projects like cleaning trash, teaching at an at-risk school, and building homes for the poor before entering college.
C. High school graduates should be required to take off time to learn about the real world before entering college.

This thesis statement can be improved in this way**; High school graduates should be required to take a year off to pursue community service projects before entering college in order to increase their maturity and global awareness. ** ;

Answered by chaplinway | 2024-06-12

The correct answer is** D. High school graduates should be required to take a year off to pursue community service projects before entering college in order to increase their maturity and global awareness.**
You want to create a comprehensive thesis statement that is going to cover all the information you are going to mention later on in the essay. The thesis statement is the most important sentence in an essay because it will give you the gist of what the entire essay is about, and here, that statement is sentence D.

Answered by Greenleafable | 2024-06-24

To improve the thesis statement, clarity and specificity should be enhanced. Adding details about the purpose and types of activities during the time off creates a more compelling argument. Additionally, avoiding the word 'should' results in a more academically appropriate thesis.
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Answered by Greenleafable | 2024-09-25